Adjective Clause: The explorers whom I most admire are astronauts. (4)

Rewritten: The explorers whom I most admire are astronauts.

Adjective Clause: One man who made space travel possible was Robert Goddard. (5)

Rewritten: One man who made space travel possible was Robert Goddard.

Adjective Clause: Goddard who tested many rockets helped develop liquid fuel. (4)

Rewritten: Goddard who tested many rockets helped develop liquid fuel.

Adjective Clause: Space travel which is very dangerous began with uncrewed spacecraft. (4)

Rewritten: Space travel which is very dangerous began with uncrewed spacecraft.

Adjective Clause: The Soviet Union was the first nation with a space satellite which they called Sputnik. (4)

Rewritten: The Soviet Union was the first nation with a space satellite which they called Sputnik.

Adjective Clause: The United States whose first satellite was called Explorer I followed the Soviet Union four months later. (7)

Rewritten: The United States whose first satellite was called Explorer I followed the Soviet Union four months later.

Adjective Clause: Yuri Gagarin who was the Soviet Union’s first astronaut orbited Earth once. (7)

Rewritten: Yuri Gagarin who was the Soviet Union’s first astronaut orbited Earth once.

Adjective Clause: Alan Shepard became the American astronaut who first traveled into space. (5)

Rewritten: Alan Shepard became the American astronaut who first traveled into space.

Adjective Clause: One event that really captured Americans’ attention was the space walk of Edward White. (5)

Rewritten: One event that really captured Americans’ attention was the space walk of Edward White.

Adjective Clause: White who had so much fun on the walk was finally ordered back into the spacecraft by Mission Control. (8)

Rewritten: White who had so much fun on the walk was finally ordered back into the spacecraft by Mission Control.

Adjective Clause: The Apollo program which we studied this year was the American moon landing project. (5)

Rewritten: The Apollo program which we studied this year was the American moon landing project.

Adjective Clause: The astronauts who were selected for this mission had to be in superb physical condition. (6)

Rewritten: The astronauts who were selected for this mission had to be in superb physical condition.

Adjective Clause: Apollo 8 which did not land orbited the moon and sent back pictures of the surface. (4)

Rewritten: Apollo 8 which did not land orbited the moon and sent back pictures of the surface.

Adjective Clause: Apollo 11 developed as the mission that was to land an American on the moon. (9)

Rewritten: Apollo 11 developed as the mission that was to land an American on the moon.

Adjective Clause: The astronauts who held Americans’ interest in 1969 were Armstrong, Aldrin, and Collins. (6)

Rewritten: The astronauts who held Americans’ interest in 1969 were Armstrong, Aldrin, and Collins.

Introductory Phrase: In baseball gloves are used by the fielders.

Rewritten: In baseball gloves are used by the fielders.

Introductory Phrase: During the commercial after this one I’ll try to telephone Andrew.

Rewritten: During the commercial after this one I’ll try to telephone Andrew.

Introductory Phrase: By the railing was the captain’s special telescope.

Rewritten: By the railing was the captain’s special telescope.

Introductory Phrase: Seeing the crash we ran out to see if we could help.

Rewritten: Seeing the crash we ran out to see if we could help.

Introductory Phrase: Inside the calzone were sausage, cheese, and onions.

Rewritten: Inside the calzone were sausage, cheese, and onions.

Introductory Phrase: Standing behind the man in the blue suit DeJuan looked impatient.

Rewritten: Standing behind the man in the blue suit DeJuan looked impatient.

Introductory Phrase: In the small space above the closet was a frightened and mewing Mimi.

Rewritten: In the small space above the closet was a frightened and mewing Mimi.

Introductory Phrase: Behind the barn cows grazed in a pasture.

Rewritten: Behind the barn cows grazed in a pasture.

Introductory Phrase: Smiling the man behind the desk motioned us to come forward.

Rewritten: Smiling the man behind the desk motioned us to come forward.

Introductory Phrase: At the wheel of the sleek red sports car was none other than my dad!

Rewritten: At the wheel of the sleek red sports car was none other than my dad!

Introductory Phrase: At the insistence of her parents she decided to attend.

Rewritten: At the insistence of her parents she decided to attend.

Introductory Phrase: Laughing she handed me the photograph.

Rewritten: Laughing she handed me the photograph.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: If you have never heard the name of Agnes Gonxha Bojaxhiu you’re not alone. (11)

Rewritten: If you have never heard the name of Agnes Gonxha Bojaxhiu you’re not alone.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: Although Agnes may be the most famous person in the world few know her original name. (11)

Rewritten: Although Agnes may be the most famous person in the world few know her original name.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: Agnes was born where people of several nationalities lived. (6)

Rewritten: Agnes was born where people of several nationalities lived.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: Although both Orthodox churches and Muslim mosques were plentiful in Agnes’s town her family was Catholic. (12)

Rewritten: Although both Orthodox churches and Muslim mosques were plentiful in Agnes’s town her family was Catholic.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: After her father died young Agnes became increasingly involved in the church. (4)

Rewritten: After her father died young Agnes became increasingly involved in the church.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: She attended meetings about missionary programs whenever she could. (3)

Rewritten: She attended meetings about missionary programs whenever she could.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: While she was attending one meeting Agnes learned of the Sisters of Loreto. (6)

Rewritten: While she was attending one meeting Agnes learned of the Sisters of Loreto.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: These nuns performed missionary work in foreign countries whenever possible. (2)

Rewritten: These nuns performed missionary work in foreign countries whenever possible.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: After she expressed her interest in the Loreto nuns’ activities a priest told her to wait until she was older. (10)

Rewritten: After she expressed her interest in the Loreto nuns’ activities a priest told her to wait until she was older.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: When she became eighteen Agnes decided she wanted to join the missionary nuns. (4)

Rewritten: When she became eighteen Agnes decided she wanted to join the missionary nuns.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: The main headquarters of the Loreto nuns was in Ireland not India. (2)

Rewritten: The main headquarters of the Loreto nuns was in Ireland not India.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: Agnes’s family reacted differently when she told them she had decided to become a nun. (11)

Rewritten: Agnes’s family reacted differently when she told them she had decided to become a nun.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: Her brother Lazar after he heard the news was shocked. (5)

Rewritten: Her brother Lazar after he heard the news was shocked.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: Since Agnes was so full of fun he felt a nun’s life would be unsuitable. (7)

Rewritten: Since Agnes was so full of fun he felt a nun’s life would be unsuitable.

Adverb Clause/Antithetical Phrase: Her mother knew she might never see Agnes again if Agnes went to India. (5)

Rewritten: Her mother knew she might never see Agnes again if Agnes went to India.