Read the passage. Delete (cross out) any unnecessary, redundant, or repeated words.
Look at the changes you made to the passage above. Removing what you crossed out, please rewrite this revised sentence.
Look at your answer above. Why is this revision the best?
Read the original sentences below. Then, consider both the possible revisions. Which revision is the best?
Original Sentences:
Electric wires were torn free. They were broken. They sizzled. They sparked. They were on the ground.