Why do we revise? List TWO reasons.
Look at the answer you chose in the question above. Why is that revision the best?
In explaining why, reference one or more of these points:
repetition, redundancy, unnecessary words (deleting)
integrity of the message: does it keep the same meaning?
relationship: does it create a relationship that isn't in the original sentences?
proximity: does it connect descriptions and ideas?
Read the sentences below.
Zeus was a god who was vengeful and powerful. He punished Hera for tricking him. He punished Hera for being unfaithful.
Read the revisions below, and choose the one that you think is the BEST.
Read these sentences. Delete any repeated or unnecessary words/phrases and redundant ideas.
Look at the changes you made to the passage above. Removing what you crossed out and rearranging what needs to be moved, please rewrite this revised sentence.