#GRAMMAR 8.11 REDO

DID YOU IMPROVE FROM THE FIRST TIME?
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PART 1 of 2
DIRECTIONS:
1. Decide if each sentence contains a dangling modifier. (10 points)
          *Select one of the options from the multiple choices listed.
          *There are EXACTLY five of each. 

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1. Walking along the beach, a shell cut Harry’s foot.

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2. Sleeping soundly, the alarm clock startled me with its harsh ringing.

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3. Working at my desk, the sudden noise was startling.

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4. Gloating over his victory, Bill bored the other wrestlers with his bragging.

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5. Draining the radiator, I replaced the antifreeze.

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6. Savoring each moment, Eileen and Tracy watched the sunset.

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7. After the journalist is more at ease, the person being interviewed might also relax.

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8. Watching carefully for hours, the flock of butterflies never arrived.

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9. If you know how to pace an interview, the hard questions are more likely to be answered honestly after the interviewee has been caught off guard.

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10. Thirsty, the glass of water was swallowed in one gulp.

PART 2 of 2
DIRECTIONS:
1. Identify the dangling modifier in the original sentence. (15 points)
          *Look at the number in parentheses to determine the exact number of words to highlight.
          *Do not include any punctuation in your answer.

2. Rewrite each sentence to correct the dangling modifier using the information provided in 
parentheses. (15 points)
          *You must rewrite the entire sentence.
          *Use proper capitalization and punctuation.
          *You may not add any additional words of your choosing.
          *Do NOT remove the commas, add any new commas, or rearrange the commas.

Sentence #1: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.

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Dangling Modifier: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.
(5 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.
(I noticed)

Sentence #2: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.

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Dangling Modifier: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.
(3 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.
(while Grandpa and I were)

Sentence #3: Crossing the border, my car was searched.

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Dangling Modifier: Crossing the border, my car was searched.
(3 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Crossing the border, my car was searched.
(I felt overwhelmed as)

Sentence #4: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.

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Dangling Modifier: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.
(3 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.
(my mom noticed)

Sentence #5: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located.

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Dangling Modifier: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located.
(4 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located.
(Julio was done)

Sentence #6: Reaching the finals, the game was won.

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Dangling Modifier: Reaching the finals, the game was won.
(3 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Reaching the finals, the game was won.
(the Lions played their best and)

Sentence #7: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made.

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Dangling Modifier: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made.
(2 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made.
(as the visiting team was)

Sentence #8: Raising his hand, the question was answered.

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Dangling Modifier: Raising his hand, the question was answered.
(3 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Raising his hand, the question was answered.
(Thomas spoke and)

Sentence #9: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy.

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Dangling Modifier: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy.
(2 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy.
(while Geraldine was)

Sentence #10: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised.

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Dangling Modifier: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised.
(5 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised.
(Victor grabbed a microphone and)

Sentence #11: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.

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Dangling Modifier: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.
(3 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.
(I was)

Sentence #12: Lost in the woods, survival was uppermost in our minds.

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Dangling Modifier: Lost in the woods, survival was uppermost in our minds.
(4 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Lost in the woods, survival was uppermost in our minds.
(we decided)

Sentence #13: Lying on the couch, my snack fell to the floor.

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Dangling Modifier: Lying on the couch, my snack fell to the floor.
(4 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Lying on the couch, my snack fell to the floor.
(I turned and)

Sentence #14: Reading intently, her entrance broke my concentration. 

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Dangling Modifier: Reading intently, her entrance broke my concentration.
(2 Words)

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Rewritten Sentence: Reading intently, her entrance broke my concentration.
(while I had been)

Sentence #15: Walking in the woods, a squirrel darted across the path.

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Dangling Modifier: Walking in the woods, a squirrel darted across the path.
(4 Words)

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#GRAMMAR 8.11 REDO

DID YOU IMPROVE FROM THE FIRST TIME?

PART 1 of 2

1. Walking along the beach, a shell cut Harry’s foot.

2. Sleeping soundly, the alarm clock startled me with its harsh ringing.

3. Working at my desk, the sudden noise was startling.

4. Gloating over his victory, Bill bored the other wrestlers with his bragging.

5. Draining the radiator, I replaced the antifreeze.

6. Savoring each moment, Eileen and Tracy watched the sunset.

7. After the journalist is more at ease, the person being interviewed might also relax.

8. Watching carefully for hours, the flock of butterflies never arrived.

9. If you know how to pace an interview, the hard questions are more likely to be answered honestly after the interviewee has been caught off guard.

10. Thirsty, the glass of water was swallowed in one gulp.

PART 2 of 2

Dangling Modifier: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.(5 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.(I noticed)

Dangling Modifier: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.(while Grandpa and I were)

Dangling Modifier: Crossing the border, my car was searched.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Crossing the border, my car was searched.(I felt overwhelmed as)

Dangling Modifier: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.(my mom noticed)

Dangling Modifier: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located.(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located. (Julio was done)

Dangling Modifier: Reaching the finals, the game was won.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Reaching the finals, the game was won.(the Lions played their best and)

Dangling Modifier: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made.(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made. (as the visiting team was)

Dangling Modifier: Raising his hand, the question was answered.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Raising his hand, the question was answered.(Thomas spoke and)

Dangling Modifier: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy.(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy. (while Geraldine was)

Dangling Modifier: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised. (5 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised. (Victor grabbed a microphone and)

Dangling Modifier: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.(I was)

Dangling Modifier: Lost in the woods, survival was uppermost in our minds.(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Lost in the woods, survival was uppermost in our minds.(we decided)

Dangling Modifier: Lying on the couch, my snack fell to the floor.(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Lying on the couch, my snack fell to the floor.(I turned and)

Dangling Modifier: Reading intently, her entrance broke my concentration. (2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Reading intently, her entrance broke my concentration. (while I had been)

Dangling Modifier: Walking in the woods, a squirrel darted across the path.(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Walking in the woods, a squirrel darted across the path.(Tanya saw)

DID YOU IMPROVE FROM THE FIRST TIME?

PART 1 of 2

1. Walking along the beach, a shell cut Harry’s foot.

2. Sleeping soundly, the alarm clock startled me with its harsh ringing.

3. Working at my desk, the sudden noise was startling.

4. Gloating over his victory, Bill bored the other wrestlers with his bragging.

5. Draining the radiator, I replaced the antifreeze.

6. Savoring each moment, Eileen and Tracy watched the sunset.

7. After the journalist is more at ease, the person being interviewed might also relax.

8. Watching carefully for hours, the flock of butterflies never arrived.

9. If you know how to pace an interview, the hard questions are more likely to be answered honestly after the interviewee has been caught off guard.

10. Thirsty, the glass of water was swallowed in one gulp.

PART 2 of 2

Dangling Modifier: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.(5 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.(I noticed)

Dangling Modifier: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.(while Grandpa and I were)

Dangling Modifier: Crossing the border, my car was searched.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Crossing the border, my car was searched.(I felt overwhelmed as)

Dangling Modifier: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.(my mom noticed)

Dangling Modifier: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located.(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located. (Julio was done)

Dangling Modifier: Reaching the finals, the game was won.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Reaching the finals, the game was won.(the Lions played their best and)

Dangling Modifier: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made.(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made. (as the visiting team was)

Dangling Modifier: Raising his hand, the question was answered.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Raising his hand, the question was answered.(Thomas spoke and)

Dangling Modifier: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy.(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy. (while Geraldine was)

Dangling Modifier: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised. (5 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised. (Victor grabbed a microphone and)

Dangling Modifier: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.(I was)

Dangling Modifier: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.
(5 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.
(I noticed)

Dangling Modifier: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.
(while Grandpa and I were)

Dangling Modifier: Crossing the border, my car was searched.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Crossing the border, my car was searched.
(I felt overwhelmed as)

Dangling Modifier: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.
(my mom noticed)

Dangling Modifier: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located.
(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located.
(Julio was done)

Dangling Modifier: Reaching the finals, the game was won.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Reaching the finals, the game was won.
(the Lions played their best and)

Dangling Modifier: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made.
(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made.
(as the visiting team was)

Dangling Modifier: Raising his hand, the question was answered.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Raising his hand, the question was answered.
(Thomas spoke and)

Dangling Modifier: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy.
(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy.
(while Geraldine was)

Dangling Modifier: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised.
(5 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised.
(Victor grabbed a microphone and)

Dangling Modifier: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.
(I was)

Dangling Modifier: Lost in the woods, survival was uppermost in our minds.
(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Lost in the woods, survival was uppermost in our minds.
(we decided)

Dangling Modifier: Lying on the couch, my snack fell to the floor.
(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Lying on the couch, my snack fell to the floor.
(I turned and)

Dangling Modifier: Reading intently, her entrance broke my concentration.
(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Reading intently, her entrance broke my concentration.
(while I had been)

Dangling Modifier: Walking in the woods, a squirrel darted across the path.
(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Walking in the woods, a squirrel darted across the path.
(Tanya saw)

Dangling Modifier: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.
(5 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Driving in heavy L.A. traffic, my head started to pound.
(I noticed)

Dangling Modifier: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Fishing for bass, our boat flipped over.
(while Grandpa and I were)

Dangling Modifier: Crossing the border, my car was searched.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Crossing the border, my car was searched.
(I felt overwhelmed as)

Dangling Modifier: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Searching my wallet, my missing credit card was found.
(my mom noticed)

Dangling Modifier: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located.
(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Before digging the hole, a shovel was located.
(Julio was done)

Dangling Modifier: Reaching the finals, the game was won.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Reaching the finals, the game was won.
(the Lions played their best and)

Dangling Modifier: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made.
(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Playing skillfully, a touchdown was made.
(as the visiting team was)

Dangling Modifier: Raising his hand, the question was answered.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Raising his hand, the question was answered.
(Thomas spoke and)

Dangling Modifier: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy.
(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Planting tomatoes, her knees got filthy.
(while Geraldine was)

Dangling Modifier: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised.
(5 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: In speaking for the committee, the issue was raised.
(Victor grabbed a microphone and)

Dangling Modifier: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.
(3 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: While running home, my heel came off my shoe.
(I was)

Dangling Modifier: Lost in the woods, survival was uppermost in our minds.
(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Lost in the woods, survival was uppermost in our minds.
(we decided)

Dangling Modifier: Lying on the couch, my snack fell to the floor.
(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Lying on the couch, my snack fell to the floor.
(I turned and)

Dangling Modifier: Reading intently, her entrance broke my concentration.
(2 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Reading intently, her entrance broke my concentration.
(while I had been)

Dangling Modifier: Walking in the woods, a squirrel darted across the path.
(4 Words)

Rewritten Sentence: Walking in the woods, a squirrel darted across the path.
(Tanya saw)