STAAR English I & II - Editing Task Cards - Aimme Lopez | Library

Instructions

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question.

Excerpt from Is it Right for People to Have the Ability to Select their Child’s Traits? By Ruby
(1) Cohabitating in an ever-changing society can be a challenge to all people, some more then others. (2) Within our changing society, we can also be challenged with the idea of new technology to advance our development. (3) With the societal norms causing people to conform to certain standards and the new technology of Genetic Engineering, is it right for people to have the ability to select their childs traits to live up to a standard? (4) Through an ethical standpoint, it goes against all moral laws of natural selection and the idea of our traits coming from our parents. (5) From a scientific standpoint, it could be the next biggest medical breakthrough to cure the world. (6) This idea of so-called “designer babies” is a very controversial thing in society today and if it becomes a reality there must be many regulations put into place.

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Excerpt from How does Technology Affect our Day to Day  Lives? By Emmanuela
(1) Through reading one of George Orwell’s classic and most well-known pieces of literature, Orwell’s prediction relating to technology plays a similar and an important role not only in the book itself but to their personal lives, where day to day we are surrounded by technology and being connected to the web. (2) Orwell forms an idea and understanding that technology causes an infringement of an individuals privacy, where almost every move is monitored by some device system. (3) This works similar to a tracking system. (4) Nothing goes unseen and in most cases technology seems to be what ends up hooking us to our social media losing a true sense and experience of the world surrounding us. (5) Though his ideas were quite spot on with what is happening around us today, I definitely believe there was no realization to what extreme level and extent it is at this current time. (6) Forms of technology such as Siri or even Amazon’s Alexa operate with the human feature to talk and socialize such as if you are carrying a conversation with another human being. (7) Conversations regarding asking questions, and finding today’s weather such as the temperature outside can be carried with a touch of a button. (8) But, this comes at a tole creating a history where previous things you have searched remain visible to look back to. (9) Orwell’s characters struggle with finding and settling to a place where there is not a way to be traced or tracked down.

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Excerpt from Size-ism in Female Athletes By Zya
(1) Walking into the gym where my cheer team was about to hold our annual “Mini Cheer Camp” the first thought that invaded my mind were not “I do not belong on this team because of my size.” (2) Of course, a fourth grader whose mind has been brainwashed into thinking that girls should look a certain way to be on a certain team, did have this thought. (3) I had only been in the room for around fifteen seconds before, without any form of trying to hide it, a little girl asked out loud why I was even on the team. (4) You might be able to predict, that was not the biggest confidence booster. (5) I had to constantly remind myself throughout the rest of the afternoon that my size had nothing to do with how good I am at what I do, and I deserve to be on this team just as much as everybody else, even if I do not look the way most people probably think I should. (6) Normally, people are expected to fit in with a certain social standard. (7) In a world where kids, teenagers and adults are ridiculed about their bodies and forced to conform to a certain body type, there is bound to be judgment upon those who don’t “fit in” with the social standards. (8) Women especially are made to feel like they have a body image to live up to. (9) When you include the deeply-ingrained societel demand of being a certain body type for female athletes, the judgment is even more extreme.  (10) In football, it is praised when a boy is big and buff. (11) He is expected to be able to be one of the best. People look at it as a great thing if boys on a football team weigh over 250 pounds, it is welcomed even. (12) So why is it that when females in their sports are overweight, it is looked at as a completely wrong and negative thing?

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Excerpt from Lessons from the NBA on Life, Learning, and Navigating Power By Eugene Eric Kim
(1) Ten months ago, I wrote a blog post about legendary basketball coach, Phil Jackson, as I was in the midst of figuring out my next chapter. (2) I expressed chagrin at how a man like Phil Jackson was essentially being put out to pasture. (3) He was getting coaching offers, but he had made it clear that he didn’t want to coach, and it seemed like teams were missing out on the opportunity to benefit from his wisdom due to their lack of imagination.
     (4) Last week, Jackson was named president of the New York Knicks. (5) If you know basketball, you know that this was an eyebrow-raising development for two reasons. (6) First, the owner of the knicks is widely acknowledged as one of the worst owners in the NBA, largely due to his meddling ways. (7) It’s hard to imagine that match working, although he has repeatedly been on record since last week that Jackson will have full control over basketball-related decisions.
     (8) Second, it was somewhat surprising that the Los Angeles Lakers never found a way to make it work with Jackson, given that he led them to five championships and is engaged to one of the owners of the team.

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Cruising into a Driverless Future By Chloe Reichel
(1) Eerie as it may seem to drive alongside a car with no one behind the wheel, autonomous vehicles are poised to hit the roads in the next few years. (2) A lawsuit between Uber and Waymo Google’s self-driving car project settled in February 2018 illustrates the fierce battle to develop driverless car technology. (3) Many cars already employ semi-autonomous technology, such as parking assistance and lane monitoring. (4) The National Highway Traffic Safety Administration (NHTSA) suggests that automated vehicles should promote safety on the road. (5) According to NHTSA’s Federal Automated Vehicles Policy, 94 percent of car accidents are linked to human choice or error. (6) Automated vehicles, the NHTSA writes, could reduce the frequency of crashes by eliminating some human error on the roads. (7) The policy indicates positive features of automated vehicles beyond safety, including potential environmental benefits and increased mobility for those otherwise unable to drive. (8) The cutting-edge technology, however, presents ethical questions and other concerns. (9) Some research included in this roundup indicates that the environmental affects of widespread adoption of autonomous vehicles might not be positive.

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