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A student is writing a short story for her teacher about a girl who moves to a new neighborhood. The student wants to revise the draft to improve the description of the setting. Read the paragraphs from the draft of the story and complete the task that follows.

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  • A student is writing a narrative for her teacher about a time she had to present a report to the class. Read the draft of the narrative and complete the task that follows.

I had been dreading this day for quite some time. I knew that each student had to present a state report. After all, my teacher had clearly explained the assignment that we were all to do: choose a state, research the state, write a report, and then share the report with the class in an oral presentation. Choosing the state was easy! I chose California because I wanted to learn more about its beautiful coastline and see Yosemite National Park. Researching the state was really fun. I used some online resources, a book about things to do in California, and some information that my cousin sent to me. My cousin has lived in California for many years and knew exactly what kind of information I was looking for.

Writing the report was also pretty easy. I am very good at taking notes, so I had a page of notes to use for my rough draft. I chose my essay headings and wrote paragraphs that included facts about California, Yosemite National Park, coastline attractions, the weather and climate, and ways to travel around the state. When I finished my draft, I read it to my mom, and she told me about a few details I might want to fix. I knew it was a good report, but I wasn't very confident about presenting it to the entire class.

The day before I was to share the report with my teacher and classmates, I began to get nervous. My mom and my teacher had both suggested that I practice by reading my report in front of a mirror. That was easy enough, but I knew it wasn't the same as presenting in class. So I read my paper to my little sister and even to my dog. That helped quite a bit, but even so, my little sister and my dog are not my teacher and classmates.

When I woke up the next morning, I knew I needed to go to school, but I really didn’t want to.

  • Write an ending for the narrative that logically follows the experiences provided in the draft.

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  • A student is writing a narrative for her teacher about geocaching. Read the draft of an excerpt of the narrative and complete the task that follows.

A Successful Search

I went geocaching for the first time with my friend Sooni. Geocaching is a modern-day treasure hunt using a GPS, or global positioning system, to locate the treasure, called a geocache. Often, the treasure is a small container with various small, interesting objects inside. People who create geocaches register them on geocaching websites so that searchers know where to look. Sooni had a GPS program on her cell phone. She had already downloaded a geocache location at the county park near the lake, so we walked to the park.

At the park, the GPS directed us to follow a trail into the forest. Then, it directed us to leave the trail. We wound our way through the trees on a thick carpet of pine needles. Finally, we stopped in a clearing the size of a small car, and Sooni said we could start searching. The trees were tall, with high branches blocking the sun, making it difficult to see in the shadows. Hoping a view from above would help, I put my hand in the crook of a tree to hoist myself up. That’s when I felt something cold and hard, like metal.

I had found the geocache. There were some things inside the container.

  • Add one or two paragraphs of description to replace the underlined text to help readers picture the geocache and what was inside it.

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Question 10
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A student is writing a narrative about a girl who likes to fix things. The student wants to revise the draft to better convey the sequence of events. Read the draft of a part of the narrative and complete the task that follows.

  • A student is writing a narrative for the class about standing in line and waiting for a store to open. The student wants to revise the draft to include details about the setting. Read the draft of the narrative and answer the question that follows.

Waiting

I shifted from the uncomfortable position that I was standing in. I had been waiting for three hours. “Would this be worth the wait?” I wondered. The line was growing even as the minutes ticked down. The air was biting, and the pellets of ice smacked my face. I pulled my jacket tighter and bent further down.

“Mike,” I called out. There he lay, warm and snug under a blanket he had brought. “It’s time! Get up!” The line had begun moving, almost rapidly. Mike jumped to his feet and quickly rolled up his blanket, and we began the steady move inside.

  • Choose the sentence that would best introduce the setting.
A. I zipped up my heavy jacket and headed inside.
B. My brother, Mike, had done this sort of thing before and knew what to expect.
C. I was grateful I had brought my coat as I leaned against the outside wall of the store.
D. The wind howled across the line of people in front of the small store as the drizzle began to turn into sleet.
A student is writing a narrative for her writing club about a girl who learns to paint. The student wants to revise the draft to provide more sensory details. Read the draft of the narrative and complete the task that follows.

Myka Makes Sense of Nature

Myka had always loved art. When she went for a walk near the water, she was constantly on the lookout for patterns and designs created by nature. She would sit and study the patterns so that she could try to recreate them when she returned home. Some days, Myka would pause during her walk and sit for a very long time looking at the things she noticed. She would study every object intensely so she could go home and paint a precise picture.

On one walk, Myka saw a spider web. Myka sat and thought about the web, closing her eyes to press its picture into her memory. She couldn’t wait to make her way back home and pick up her paintbrush.

  • Revise the underlined sentence by choosing the two sentences that provide more sensory details.
A. The spider web gleamed in the sun as it waved gently in the air.
B. The spider web had not been there before nor had the log near the water.
C. On her last walk outside along the water, Myka saw a spider web between a log and the grass.
D. On one walk, Myka found a big spider web that was stuck right down between a log and a patch of tall grass.
E. On a walk, Myka found a spider web that was different than any she had ever seen on her walks along the water.
F. On one walk last week, Myka discovered a delicate spider web connecting an old rotten log and a stand of feathery grass.
  • A student is writing a story for his teacher about a brother and a sister who are working on a project to collect scrap metal and wood. Read the draft of the opening of this story and complete the task that follows.

Every Possible Scrap

Max and his sister, Kate, walked from house to house, pulling the wagon that they had once used as children. Now they used the wagon to carry scrap metal and wood that they collected from community members. Their town’s library had recently asked for help, and Max and Kate agreed to create a special craft project to be auctioned at the annual library fundraising event. Each year, the library board held an auction, and the money raised was used to buy new books and magazines. When their parents asked if the children would consider helping the town’s library, Max and Kate agreed.

“One more house, Max,” Kate said. “Mom’s waiting on us for supper.”

“We have time. Mom will keep supper warm for us,” Max insisted and pulled the wagon further down the street.

“No, really,” Kate said, “Mom said six o’clock sharp, and we should try not to be late.”

“I like doing this work,” said Max.

Shaking her head, Kate struggled to keep up with Max, who had already turned down Green Street.

  • Choose the best revision of the underlined dialogue between Max and Kate to show why Max feels strongly about helping the community.
A. “Kate, what are you doing? Follow me this way! If you don’t hurry, we won’t be able to visit the Millers. They told me that they had a box of scrap wood ready for pickup,” said Max.
B. “I just don’t understand why there aren’t more people who want to help. Before soccer practice, I asked Justin if he wanted to come with us, but he just said that he was too busy,” said Max.
C. “We’ll just explain the situation to Mom. After all, she encouraged us to get involved, Kate. We are improving our library by acting as collectors! With our contribution, the library should be able to add a lot of books!” said Max.
D. “If we hurry, we can finish collecting materials from the houses on Green Street and go on to North Street. There are at least fifteen houses on North Street, Kate. This means they may have a lot of scrap metal to give us,” said Max.
Meeting Mrs. Lawrence

The house next door to Gabby’s house had seemed mysterious to her from her first day in the new neighborhood. Gabby passed the old Victorian-style home each day on her way to and from school. It had dark green ivy growing on all sides. The walkway to the entrance featured a colorful, modern sculpture. The windows were covered by thick curtains, though no one ever seemed to be looking out.

Gabby once spotted the owners, though. The couple wore stern expressions and elegant but outdated clothing. She often heard pleasant lively music drifting through an open window. Sometimes when Gabby passed the house, she saw a huge bird cage placed on the sagging porch, probably to give the large parrot who lived in it some fresh air. Gabby’s curiosity about the couple and the house behind the rotting picket fence increased with each passing day.

Click on two sentences of description that do not match the setting as described in the rest of the short story.
  • A student is writing a narrative for class about an experience gathering natural foods. The student wants to revise the draft to introduce a character. Read the draft of the narrative and complete the task that follows.

Field Trip with Granny

I loved visiting my grandmother. One day she asked if I would like to go with her to find some food for dinner in the field next to her house. I knew about food from her garden, but I certainly didn’t think we could find something to eat in the field.

After gathering a few tools, we started across the field next to her house in search of food for dinner. Granny pointed to a green weed that my parents tried to eliminate from their lawn. “The dandelion leaves,” she pointed out, “will make a great nutritious salad.”

Nearby, we saw some small button mushrooms. “Mushrooms can be very tasty or very deadly,” warned Granny. “You have to know how to tell the difference.” Luckily she knew which mushrooms to choose.

Finally, Granny said that we needed something to drink. I couldn’t imagine drinking the roots she was digging, but later when she boiled the sassafras roots, I discovered that the tea actually tasted delicious. Granny also explained that sassafras tea was a healthy spring tonic.

  • Choose the sentence that would best introduce the grandmother character:
A. My grandmother was a sweet, kind lady.
B. My granny was a typical loving grandmother.
C. Granny was an amazingly resourceful person.
D. Grandmother was proud of her country garden.
  • A student is writing a detective story for his class about solving a mystery. The student wants to revise the draft to better convey the sequence of events. Read the draft of the story and complete the task that follows.

Another Day on the Job

Johnston entered the lobby of the hotel where the incident had occurred. After introducing himself to the manager and other hotel staff, he was led up to the fifth floor, which had been cleared as he had requested over the phone. The person responsible would not be caught here and now, but Johnston was fine with that. After so many similar occurrences across the city, Johnston knew he was dealing with a clever person. He needed time to investigate the scene and, hopefully, get some clues.

Johnston got to work lifting fingerprints off the furniture. So many people came through hotels that it was likely he would find dozens of sets of prints. Though he was fairly sure fingerprints would not lead him to a suspect, collecting them was a routine part of the job, so he busied himself with that task first.

  • Choose the transition phrase that best connects the two narrative paragraphs:
A. In the meantime,
B. During the investigation,
C. Before announcing his arrival,
D. After a routine glance around the room,
  • A student is writing a piece of historical fiction for his social studies teacher about the events leading up to the Boston Tea Party. The student wants to revise the draft to better organize the sequence of events. Read the draft of a part of the story and complete the task that follows.

Before the Party

Samuel Adams and his neighbor sat together at the end of a long day, sharing news about the political situation in the colonies, and, of course, sharing a cup of tea.

“These taxes are getting to be absurd,” said the neighbor. “We have no choice but to buy our tea from one company, and even though the prices are cheaper now, something just doesn’t seem right. Likely King George is trying to fool us.”

“Keep in mind that he is trying to get rid of our merchants who won’t be able to sell tea anymore. This will hurt our economy. Something must be done,” Samuel Adams said.

  • Choose the best two sentences that could be added after the first paragraph to introduce the problem:
A. 'We must do something to find better tea,' Samuel Adams argued.
B. 'I can’t believe that King George just instituted a tax on tea!' Samuel Adams lamented.
C. 'This tea tastes absolutely delicious tonight,' marveled Samuel Adams as he took a sip.
D. 'The wretched king has gone and done it again . . . more taxes,' sighed Samuel Adams.
E. 'Thank you for inviting me for tea. You are a kind neighbor,' Samuel Adams said politely.
F. 'It is nice that the king is so far away . . . he really knows nothing about our political strength,' Samuel Adams stated.
In Pieces

Willa sat at the kitchen table with many small plastic and metal pieces spread out before her—the shell of a calculator off to the side.

“What are you working on, Willa?” her sister asked. “That doesn’t look like homework.”

A bright ray of sunshine burst through the kitchen window, adding warmth to the kitchen.

“Well, I started to do my math homework, but then the calculator
wasn’t working properly. I thought I could take it apart, see what the problem is, fix the problem, and put the calculator back together again. I think the calculator just might work.” Earlier, Willa had begun reassembling the calculator.

“Sounds like a tough job,” her sister said. Willa placed each piece back inside carefully, consulting a picture of the inside of the calculator that she had taken before she started working.

Click on the two sentences that are distracting or interrupt the flow of the narrative.