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Evaluating Informational Body Paragraphs

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Pretend your friend is asking for advice on how to revise his/her paragraph.
List TWO "celebrations" for this paragraph and ONE "suggestion":

The most common object used from elephants is Ivory. “Recent research by STE revealed that an estimated 100,000 elephants were killed for their ivory in Africa between 2010
and 2012. The number of elephants remaining in Africa is uncertain, but are
likely to be in the region of 500,000.Taking into account births these losses
are driving declines in the world’s wild African elephants on the order of 2-3%
a year.” In some country’s Ivory is used in medicine. The website Poaching Facts 
said that “Ivory tusks and worked ivory have been kept as ornamental trophies
and a sign of wealth for hundreds of years, but the ivory carving industry in
India is said to date back 4,000 years (Martin and Vigne, 1989).” Owning ivory
is important to some cultures because it means that you have wealth. 70% of
illegal ivory goes to China and gets sold on the streets for 1,000 dollars a
pound. It is crazy to think about how expensive and how valuable Ivory is. I
think that we should stop by for jewelry and decoration purposes. We should only
get Ivory for medicine, and try our best to use another ingredient then ivory in
our medicine.

Question 2

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What is the MAIN IDEA of this paragraph? Do you think the author backed up his/her opinion well? Why or why not?
Poaching causes many problems. One major problem is the loss of many common animals. According to the African Wildlife Foundation, poaching has caused lions to become extinct in seven African countries. The lion example was caused by an outside problem: habitat loss. Lions moved closer to humans due to habitat loss and are “killed by farmers in retaliation [to harm something because it has done harm towards you] of preying on livestock.” Another example is mountain gorillas have decreased down to fewer than 900 remain, as of 2012. The “recent surge of trafficking of infant gorillas” is a big part of this. As you can see, poaching has caused animal species to start to die out. It is estimated by World Animal Foundation that one fifth of all animal species will be extinct by 2025. Also said in that article, poaching for various reasons (hides/skins, traditional medicines, food, tourist souvenirs, etc.) is a major factor in the possible extinction of these iconic animals. In conclusion, poaching has cause influential changes to the status of many animals.

Question 3

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What is the MAIN IDEA of this paragraph? Highlight, copy, and paste which piece of EVIDENCE (sentence) you think best supports the main idea. Then explain why you think it supports it well. The final main way to help with e-waste is to join or start a group for e-waste. You can message companies to help stop e-waste in new ways you might think of or encourage them to pay for the recycling of e-waste instead of making the customers pay for it. You can also try to pass a new law about e-waste once you have gathered a lot of people. According to Ted Smith, founder of the San Francisco-based Electronics TakeBack Coalition, “...e-waste is never particularly easy or clean even when handled properly. Taking apart some equipment requires removing up to 50 screws.” “Industrial-scale shredders turn circuit boards and hard drives into huge bits of glass, metal and plastics. Those pieces have to be melted in a smelter to isolate the gold, silver, copper and palladium.” One problem is “There are no smelters that do this in the U.S.,” due to the environmental effects of the smelting process, Smith said. Therefore, the shredding companies “send the metals by rail car all the way to northern Quebec, where there is a smelter.” So you can donate money to these places so that they can run the smelter, pay for the tools that they need to help recycle e-waste, and to ship the materials to places like Quebec.

Question 4

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Another friend is asking for advice on how to improve his/her essay. List ONE "celebration" and ONE "suggestion." This paragraph is about how people are trying to help. People are trying to help by guarding the remaining northern white rhinos. Scientist are even trying to make clones with the help of the last remaining male. The other two are female. “Rhino poaching is currently at a crisis point. By the end of 2015, the number of African rhinos killed by poachers had increased for the sixth year in a row with at least 1,338 rhinos killed by poachers across Africa in 2015.” resource found on https://www.savetherhino.org/rhino_info/poaching_statistics. [https://www.savetherhino.org/rhino_info/poaching_statistics.%C2%A0%22];

Question 5

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Do you think the TOPIC SENTENCE and CONCLUDING SENTENCE align with each other and match the detail sentences in the rest of the paragraph? Yes/No ...explain your thinking. Another way the increase production of Global Warming is happening is from acts that things we do. As you may already know, oxygen comes from plants for us to breath while we breath out carbon dioxide for plants. However, because of certain human activities, such as deforestation, which is the act of cutting down more trees than planted, oxygen is not being replenished. Plants are being uprooted by the activities we do daily such as clearing of land and agriculture (overpopulation of a living thing or plant) . When we clear land we are tearing trees and plants down for room to build buildings and homes. When they tear the trees down they're taking away our oxygen. The levels of oxygen and carbon dioxide should be balanced enough for both humans and plants to survive and not cause Global Warming. “Deforestation of rainforests is a large contributor to global warming and CO2 emissions, but planting new trees, even in your own backyard, can help to offset this,” states in the article “Top Ways to Stop Global Warming” article from the San Francisco Chronicle 2017. They’re trying to say even a little action can make a big difference. Humans need to be more thoughtful when it comes to clearing land and forests, and instead use sustainable practices. We should consider our activities before we do them and realize about the Greenhouse Gases.

Question 6

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Do you think the TOPIC SENTENCE and CONCLUDING SENTENCE align with each other and match the detail sentences in the rest of the paragraph? Yes/No ...explain your thinking. If the polar ice caps melt all the animals have to start to live in different places and if they were able to be transported to a different location they would not be used as adapted to it the new biome so most would eventually die. Humans will affected by this rise in temperature and it will minimize the amount the amount of the fossil fuels that we can get. Due to the massive heat change it has become more prone for mosquitoes to spread deadly virus such as the new deadly virus “zika”. The heat change is making the virus spread a lot faster than most due to the high amounts of humidity caused by the greenhouse gases,. “ According to Effects of Global Warming."